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Well, I want to get stuff DONE. Poking around with "Unsolved Mysteries" (the evil Jill fic) and "Big Teeth" isn't good enough for me! I need to "write" write! And stop reading![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-community.gif)
deleterius and HMS STFU beforehand.
-VD: That probably would help, yes. So what do you plan to do?-
Well, I will allow myself some fooling around on the web time. But I'm reserving two hours on Saturday and Sunday (probably either right before or right after I play Sims) to just plain write.
-VD2: Well, or edit.-
Either way! *pokes self* Come on, get your get up and go back!
-DW: Your get up and go's still here -- otherwise you wouldn't be producing so many plotbunnies. It just seems to be rudderless at the moment.-
-TD: Well, when it comes to typing at any rate. Your actual written work doesn't seem to be suffering too much. Even yesterday, you wrote SOMETHING.-
True. I suppose I'm not COMPLETELY useless when it comes to fan fic.
-D: Is it anything in particular that's hindering you with your writing?-
Editing is just plain old procrastination. Actual writing is annoying little writer's blocks preventing me from getting to the juicy bits. Example -- I know how to do Jill's breakup, I've gone over it in my head at work -- I'm just not sure how to get there.
-OD: I must admit, we rather support anything that keeps Jill away from us.-
This is just delaying the inevitable. *prods the story* Work, darn you.
On a lighter note, here's the update from the Hill Valley Tannens. Biff and Jiff have crossed an important threshold -- some red hands and a tickle, and they're best friends.
-M: Tannens best friends with ANYONE? I'm impressed.-
So am I. They spent the early morning hours doing creative stuff, though Jiff also took the chance to work out a little.
Then it was time for breakfast -- and for Biff, a drink. Don't you love that beer belly of his?
-VM: Uh, NO.-
Jiff headed off for school, and a little while afterwards, Biff went to work. Buford passed by as Biff got in the carpool. Ended up stealing Biff's paper.
Jiff was the first home. His grades now at C+, I decided to have him do a little homework. Jiff cares just enough to keep from failing.
However, I never realized that a Sim who never learned to study takes FOREVER to do his homework. He ended up leaving it at 90% complete because his fun was bottoming out.
After abandoning his homework, I had him greet Joey Baines to satisfy a "meet someone new" want.
He and Joey didn't talk much, as Joey went straight to Jiff's bass. To fill his fun, Jiff did the Dance of the Dork.
-M: *snrrk*-
-M2: That's bad. *giggle*-
Yeah, I know. Biff returned home with a promotion to Con Artist and Komei -- the work boost made them friends, which is good. Jiff sent Joey home, then turned on the radio and started smustling.
I had Biff join in after a bath -- however, he joined in while still in the bathroom, which meant he couldn't see who he was smustling with. Which led to some amusing expressions:
Then it was time for Biff to work out -- he needs a Body point (and two mechanical points) to get a promotion. Out of curiosity, I had Jiff act as his Personal Trainer. He got awfully pissed at Biff.
Eventually Jiff shooed him off the machine and did some working out himself. Biff alternated between cheering him -- and crying his eyes out. O.o
He actually temporarily trapped Jiff there with his sobbing, so I ended the session and sent Jiff to bed. Biff got his Body Point, then went on a mysterious late-night mission.
Yup, he stole his gnome back (though I don't recall him getting a gnome stolen). Then it was off to bed for him.
-J: Interesting day.-
Yup, though I wish Strickland had wandered by. Ah well. Another time.
Random shot of a pretty rainbow over Hill Valley:
-D: To try what?-
Let me put it this way -- I've been reading far too muchdeleterius.
-VD: Finally getting the sporkage out of your system?-
Yes. Yes I am. As it's late, I'll do a relatively easy spork.
-M: Oh?-
Yes. Here's the gritty details, in fulldeleterius mode (technically, the characters aren't Mary Sues, but they're definitely NOT canonical):
Story Or Series Title: the alternete bttf
Fandom: Back To The Future
Culprit Author's Name: princessserenity3000 I'm sure we all remember HER, right?
Full Name (plus titles if any): Jennifer Jane Parker, Marty McFly, Doc Brown
Full Species(es): Canonius Unrecognizablus
Hair Color (include adjectives): Canon (at least, she never says differently)
Eye Color (include adjectives): Canon (ditto)
Unusual Markings/Colorations: Nothing that I can see
Special Possessions (if any): Doc has a dog named "eignstien," Jennifer has a blue poodle skirt, Marty a leather jacket and leather pants
Annoying Origin: The loins of Mr. and Mrs. Parker, Mr. and Mrs. McFly, and Mr. and Mrs. Brown, respectively
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Claiming to BE them
Annoying Special Abilities: The power to make BTTF about five minutes long. Stupidity that Biff Tannen cannot rival.
Other Annoying Traits: Talking without using quotation marks. Starring in huge run-on sentences. You'll see in the sample.
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
A bit hard, since her chapters are so short, but I'll find somethilng to snip.
my Alternate back to the future parts 1-3
Doc: I fail to see why the word "alternate" is more deserving of capitalization than the title of the movie.
chapter one back to 1985!
Marty: So we don't go anywhere?
hey this is my story of what would happen if Jennifer was a major charecter
Jennifer: Well, I suppose it would have been nice to get a larger role. . . .
1:15 saturday october 5th,
Doc: October 5th was a Saturday, but on that day I was still completing my work on the time machine.
Jennifer: Maybe she forgot the 2 in front of the 5?
Marty: Yeah, but the first time travel experiment was on October 26th.
marty walked, over to the twin pines mall with his girlfriend Jennifer,
Jennifer: We're just randomly walking around at 1:15 in the morning.
Doc: I called Marty to remind him in the movie -- I wouldn't just wait around for him to show up. Especially not at that hour.
little did they know thier lifes were about to change forever, doc came out and greeted marty and introduced himself to Jennifer you must kept this to your selfs he then reveald the time machine, wow Jennifer said that is a cool car.
All blink.
Doc: I introduced myself to Jennifer? I was under the impression we had met, considering she quotes me in the film!
Jennifer: Our English teacher would go CRAZY seeing all this. "lifes?" "selfs?"
Marty: Maybe English isn't the girl's first language.
Doc: That may be -- but other languages have grammar as well. This looks like the ultimate form of stream of consciousness writing.
then doc proceted to put eignstien into the car and it went 88 miles per hour then he came back 5 secounds, later so doc what do you use to make this thing go back in time plutonem marty then said doc are you telling me this suckers nuculer?
Doc: I sent EINSTEIN into the future for a full MINUTE.
Marty: Uh -- did I say that the car ran on plutonium, or did Doc?
Doc: It appears that you said "Later so Doc what do you use to make this thing go back in time plutonium."
where did you get the librians
Doc: Where did who get the -- librarians?
Marty: *snort* Best misspelling of "Libyans" I've ever seen.
oh no! the found me, Jennifer and marty then went into the delorean the libryens began
Marty: Guess the librarians are pretty serious about those late fees.
Jennifer: The weird thing is, she spelt "DeLorean" correctly.
lets, see if you morans can do 90 he then went in to time to 1955!
Marty: Yeah, let's just ignore the bits where they SHOT MY BEST FRIEND TO DEATH, then TRIED TO KILL ME WITH A ROCKET LAUNCHER!
marty ,were are we Jennifer said i don't know jen marty look out!
Jennifer: I said "I don't know JEN?" But I'm Jen!
Doc: Perhaps it's a badly-typed "then?"
Marty: I haven't a clue what half of these words are supposed to be.
marty ran into a scarecrow then he went straigh into mr. peebody's barn and woke, evreyone in the house up they went in to see what the raccet was about they then invited jennifer and marty to stay over the night so they all went to bed.
Marty: . . . They WHAT?! I remember them shooting at me!
Jennifer: They just invite us in like that? "Oh, you destroyed our scarecrow and barn -- of COURSE you can stay the night!" And we all just go to bed? No explanations, no excuses?
Doc: I don't think this girl has a firm grasp of what happens when a couple of teenagers crash their car into someone's barn. They're certainly not invited in to spend the night -- at least not after some serious questioning.
chapter 2 1955?
Jennifer and marty, got up early and had breakfast
Marty: What's with the random commas?
they then went out to search for doc, they went to his house and told him what happend in 1985,
Marty: . . . Because of course I know exactly where everything is in 1955. I'm not lost and scared because I just watched my best friend DIE -- oh, wait, she cut that part -- and I just traveled through time and crashed into someone's barn.
he told them not to go anywhere unless they had the right clothes, so he handed them some money and they all went shoping
Doc: This is not me. I wouldn't believe random teenagers who showed up at my mansion claiming to be from another time period -- not without some good, hard evidence, like Marty's bathroom story. And I tell them not to go anywhere without the right clothes, then immediately hand them some money and tell them to go shopping?! What irresponsibility!
Jennifer bought ,a blouse and a blue poddle skirt marty bought a leather jacket and leather pants
Marty: Leather PANTS?
Jennifer: *giggle*
they then decited to go to lou's cafe marty saw his father except he was 17 and Jennifer saw her mother she didnt rember, her because her mom died when she was a baby the two girls looked at each other Jennifer fainted, cladia just stared into space
Marty: Wait a minute, when is this? If I've already met Doc, shouldn't George not be at the cafe anymore? I mean, I don't think the guy LIVES there.
Jennifer: Uh -- if I don't remember my mother, why should I faint if I see her?
Doc: Precisely! The reason you fainted in Part II was because you saw and recognized your older self! You shouldn't be reacting that way to a parent you didn't even know!
Marty: And "cladia" just stares into space? I'd be kind of worried if someone fainted after seeing me.
Marty grabbed Jennifer and brought her to docs house, doc was standing there in shock
Doc: "Great Scott, I've been made to suffer brain damage at the hands of a rather incompentent author!"
marty what happened? um Jennifer ran into her mom great scot! i knew this would happen!
Marty: If you knew that would happen, why'd you let us go to the cafe?
Jennifer: And if you can see the future, why don't you use it to keep your mansion from burning down? Or win the lottery?
Doc: Well, we know my stance on gambling with the assistance of future information.
well i think you should stay here for a little longer, when Jennifer wakes up i wll explain the rules of time travel, well doc i got to be going now okay marty i will talk to you both in the morning.
. . . .
Marty: SHOULDN'T YOU BE LOCKING US IN YOUR MANSION?!
Doc: SHOULDN'T YOU BE MORE WORRIED ABOUT YOUR GIRLFRIEND?!
Jennifer: How old is this girl again?
Doc: *checks her profile again* Her profile doesn't say -- of course, her profile is only one sentence long. For all we know, this story could have been written by a eight-year-old.
Marty: Hell no. I was writing better than this at eight, and that's how old I was when I set fire to the living room rug.
SNIP! I'll cut Chapter 3 entirely. Basically, Jennifer wakes up at 7:00 that night, and Doc tells them the rules of time travel -- don't run into your parents and don't touch anything. That's it. And then he lets Jennifer go outside for a walk, and she randomly runs into Biff Tannen, who randomly tries to drag her away.
Chapter 4 uh oh were in trouble!
Doc: That's a statement I can fully agree with.
Marty: Hear hear!
who are you and what do you want with me oh i just want you to go to the prom with me no way i already have a date who marty mcfly and he's way better then you well to bad youre comeing with me
Jennifer: I don't know that much about him, but I don't think Biff just goes up to girls and tells them they're going to the prom with him.
Marty: It was the Enchantment Under the Sea Dance, not the prom! And Biff wouldn't bother with Jennifer, he had a crush on my mother! Uh, no offense Jennifer.
Jennifer: None taken.
Doc: *staring* You -- used -- Marty's -- real -- name. ARE YOU TRYING TO CAUSE A PARADOX?!
Marty: PodPerson you never told us not to, Doc. Besides, it looks like either Jennifer or Biff is talking to themselves.
never i wouldent go out with you if you were the last man on earth! Jennifer then steped on his foot and ran away Marty then cought up with here jen were have you been biff tried to kidanap me what well i guess we have to stay away from him ah huh now lets go find doc!
Marty: . . . You know, I think this version of me doesn't like Jennifer at all. I'm pretty nonchalant about her fainting and nearly being kidnapped.
Jennifer: And why do we have to find the Doc? Did I really wander that far away from the mansion?
Doc: *waving arms around like a windmill* You shouldn't have left the mansion at ALL! The only reason I let Marty out was because he had to fix things between his parents! Otherwise we run the risk of someone causing a paradox and wiping out the entire space-time continuum!
Marty: *ducking* Hey, Doc, be careful!
Doc: Precisely! WHY AREN'T I BEING CAREFUL?!
A/N:well like my cliffhanger please people i need ideas ps whoever said that i took this from the messege board yes your right i did but they wanted someone to write a fanfiction like this and stop being so mean to me in thje reviews!
Jennifer: That wasn't a cliffhanger. That was barely a stumble.
Marty: "Stop being so mean to me in the reviews?" What were they writing?
Doc: *checks* Someone was rewriting the stories in legible form, and others were telling the author how to improve.
Marty: *rolls eyes* "I need ideas" -- I've got an idea for you, take this story and shove it--
Jennifer: Marty!
Hello evreyone thank you to all who have reviewed my story well yes this was originaly gonna be about if Jennifer was involved in bttf part 2 and 3 but i decied to add her in 1 yes the other parts will come quickly chapter six will be the last chapter for part one chapter 7 will start part to well here is
Marty: She's doing Part I in six chapters?!
Doc: I suppose anything is possible once you cut out anything that has any narrative qualities. I doubt this story even has a plot.
Jennifer: Why can't I be in good fiction?
chapter 5
well we found doc and me and jennifer got on the skateboard to go to his house
Marty: Whoa, random POV switch.
Jennifer: How come we have your skateboard with us? Wasn't that left in 1985?
Doc: So you found me -- only to immediately turn around and go back to my house. Is there any logic at all in this story?
traffic was jammed Like always people were stareing at us like they have never seen anyone on a skateboard before?
Doc: As it's 1955, NO. What are you doing using 1985 technology in 1955, anyway?
Marty: Well, I sort of improvised it when Biff was chasing me around. Of course, that was to keep from getting killed by him and his gang. So I haven't a clue why Pod!me is doing this.
oh well we arived at doc's house aproxamitly at 12:00 pm.
Marty: That's -- that's IT?!
Jennifer: This was the result of the great "cliffhanger?"
Doc: Why did she even bother? She hasn't even updated from this point.
Marty: I suppose that that's actually a good thing. . . .
-VD: . . . That's got to be a troll.-
I don't know -- she is on the message board, and she types like that ALL THE TIME. She also has two other stories -- "Jennifer Parker's Diary" and "Jennifers Youngest Daughter," written in the same style.
-OD: *tentacles headdesk* We're sure she's not eight?-
*goes over to her profile on BTTFOnline* She lists her birthday as June 10, 1988. That means she's roughly two years younger than me -- about 17.
-M: *facepalm*-
Yeah, I know.
Well, I really need to ged to bed. Night all, enjoy the spork, and I dare someone to create an icon that reads: "Your stupidity makes (Doc Brown/Marty McFly) emo."
Well, I want to get stuff DONE. Poking around with "Unsolved Mysteries" (the evil Jill fic) and "Big Teeth" isn't good enough for me! I need to "write" write! And stop reading
deleterius and HMS STFU beforehand.-VD: That probably would help, yes. So what do you plan to do?-
Well, I will allow myself some fooling around on the web time. But I'm reserving two hours on Saturday and Sunday (probably either right before or right after I play Sims) to just plain write.
-VD2: Well, or edit.-
Either way! *pokes self* Come on, get your get up and go back!
-DW: Your get up and go's still here -- otherwise you wouldn't be producing so many plotbunnies. It just seems to be rudderless at the moment.-
-TD: Well, when it comes to typing at any rate. Your actual written work doesn't seem to be suffering too much. Even yesterday, you wrote SOMETHING.-
True. I suppose I'm not COMPLETELY useless when it comes to fan fic.
-D: Is it anything in particular that's hindering you with your writing?-
Editing is just plain old procrastination. Actual writing is annoying little writer's blocks preventing me from getting to the juicy bits. Example -- I know how to do Jill's breakup, I've gone over it in my head at work -- I'm just not sure how to get there.
-OD: I must admit, we rather support anything that keeps Jill away from us.-
This is just delaying the inevitable. *prods the story* Work, darn you.
On a lighter note, here's the update from the Hill Valley Tannens. Biff and Jiff have crossed an important threshold -- some red hands and a tickle, and they're best friends.
-M: Tannens best friends with ANYONE? I'm impressed.-
So am I. They spent the early morning hours doing creative stuff, though Jiff also took the chance to work out a little.
Then it was time for breakfast -- and for Biff, a drink. Don't you love that beer belly of his?
-VM: Uh, NO.-
Jiff headed off for school, and a little while afterwards, Biff went to work. Buford passed by as Biff got in the carpool. Ended up stealing Biff's paper.
Jiff was the first home. His grades now at C+, I decided to have him do a little homework. Jiff cares just enough to keep from failing.
However, I never realized that a Sim who never learned to study takes FOREVER to do his homework. He ended up leaving it at 90% complete because his fun was bottoming out.
After abandoning his homework, I had him greet Joey Baines to satisfy a "meet someone new" want.
He and Joey didn't talk much, as Joey went straight to Jiff's bass. To fill his fun, Jiff did the Dance of the Dork.
-M: *snrrk*-
-M2: That's bad. *giggle*-
Yeah, I know. Biff returned home with a promotion to Con Artist and Komei -- the work boost made them friends, which is good. Jiff sent Joey home, then turned on the radio and started smustling.
I had Biff join in after a bath -- however, he joined in while still in the bathroom, which meant he couldn't see who he was smustling with. Which led to some amusing expressions:
Then it was time for Biff to work out -- he needs a Body point (and two mechanical points) to get a promotion. Out of curiosity, I had Jiff act as his Personal Trainer. He got awfully pissed at Biff.
Eventually Jiff shooed him off the machine and did some working out himself. Biff alternated between cheering him -- and crying his eyes out. O.o
He actually temporarily trapped Jiff there with his sobbing, so I ended the session and sent Jiff to bed. Biff got his Body Point, then went on a mysterious late-night mission.
Yup, he stole his gnome back (though I don't recall him getting a gnome stolen). Then it was off to bed for him.
-J: Interesting day.-
Yup, though I wish Strickland had wandered by. Ah well. Another time.
Random shot of a pretty rainbow over Hill Valley:
-D: To try what?-
Let me put it this way -- I've been reading far too much
deleterius.-VD: Finally getting the sporkage out of your system?-
Yes. Yes I am. As it's late, I'll do a relatively easy spork.
-M: Oh?-
Yes. Here's the gritty details, in full
deleterius mode (technically, the characters aren't Mary Sues, but they're definitely NOT canonical):Story Or Series Title: the alternete bttf
Fandom: Back To The Future
Culprit Author's Name: princessserenity3000 I'm sure we all remember HER, right?
Full Name (plus titles if any): Jennifer Jane Parker, Marty McFly, Doc Brown
Full Species(es): Canonius Unrecognizablus
Hair Color (include adjectives): Canon (at least, she never says differently)
Eye Color (include adjectives): Canon (ditto)
Unusual Markings/Colorations: Nothing that I can see
Special Possessions (if any): Doc has a dog named "eignstien," Jennifer has a blue poodle skirt, Marty a leather jacket and leather pants
Annoying Origin: The loins of Mr. and Mrs. Parker, Mr. and Mrs. McFly, and Mr. and Mrs. Brown, respectively
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Claiming to BE them
Annoying Special Abilities: The power to make BTTF about five minutes long. Stupidity that Biff Tannen cannot rival.
Other Annoying Traits: Talking without using quotation marks. Starring in huge run-on sentences. You'll see in the sample.
Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
A bit hard, since her chapters are so short, but I'll find somethilng to snip.
my Alternate back to the future parts 1-3
Doc: I fail to see why the word "alternate" is more deserving of capitalization than the title of the movie.
chapter one back to 1985!
Marty: So we don't go anywhere?
hey this is my story of what would happen if Jennifer was a major charecter
Jennifer: Well, I suppose it would have been nice to get a larger role. . . .
1:15 saturday october 5th,
Doc: October 5th was a Saturday, but on that day I was still completing my work on the time machine.
Jennifer: Maybe she forgot the 2 in front of the 5?
Marty: Yeah, but the first time travel experiment was on October 26th.
marty walked, over to the twin pines mall with his girlfriend Jennifer,
Jennifer: We're just randomly walking around at 1:15 in the morning.
Doc: I called Marty to remind him in the movie -- I wouldn't just wait around for him to show up. Especially not at that hour.
little did they know thier lifes were about to change forever, doc came out and greeted marty and introduced himself to Jennifer you must kept this to your selfs he then reveald the time machine, wow Jennifer said that is a cool car.
All blink.
Doc: I introduced myself to Jennifer? I was under the impression we had met, considering she quotes me in the film!
Jennifer: Our English teacher would go CRAZY seeing all this. "lifes?" "selfs?"
Marty: Maybe English isn't the girl's first language.
Doc: That may be -- but other languages have grammar as well. This looks like the ultimate form of stream of consciousness writing.
then doc proceted to put eignstien into the car and it went 88 miles per hour then he came back 5 secounds, later so doc what do you use to make this thing go back in time plutonem marty then said doc are you telling me this suckers nuculer?
Doc: I sent EINSTEIN into the future for a full MINUTE.
Marty: Uh -- did I say that the car ran on plutonium, or did Doc?
Doc: It appears that you said "Later so Doc what do you use to make this thing go back in time plutonium."
where did you get the librians
Doc: Where did who get the -- librarians?
Marty: *snort* Best misspelling of "Libyans" I've ever seen.
oh no! the found me, Jennifer and marty then went into the delorean the libryens began
Marty: Guess the librarians are pretty serious about those late fees.
Jennifer: The weird thing is, she spelt "DeLorean" correctly.
lets, see if you morans can do 90 he then went in to time to 1955!
Marty: Yeah, let's just ignore the bits where they SHOT MY BEST FRIEND TO DEATH, then TRIED TO KILL ME WITH A ROCKET LAUNCHER!
marty ,were are we Jennifer said i don't know jen marty look out!
Jennifer: I said "I don't know JEN?" But I'm Jen!
Doc: Perhaps it's a badly-typed "then?"
Marty: I haven't a clue what half of these words are supposed to be.
marty ran into a scarecrow then he went straigh into mr. peebody's barn and woke, evreyone in the house up they went in to see what the raccet was about they then invited jennifer and marty to stay over the night so they all went to bed.
Marty: . . . They WHAT?! I remember them shooting at me!
Jennifer: They just invite us in like that? "Oh, you destroyed our scarecrow and barn -- of COURSE you can stay the night!" And we all just go to bed? No explanations, no excuses?
Doc: I don't think this girl has a firm grasp of what happens when a couple of teenagers crash their car into someone's barn. They're certainly not invited in to spend the night -- at least not after some serious questioning.
chapter 2 1955?
Jennifer and marty, got up early and had breakfast
Marty: What's with the random commas?
they then went out to search for doc, they went to his house and told him what happend in 1985,
Marty: . . . Because of course I know exactly where everything is in 1955. I'm not lost and scared because I just watched my best friend DIE -- oh, wait, she cut that part -- and I just traveled through time and crashed into someone's barn.
he told them not to go anywhere unless they had the right clothes, so he handed them some money and they all went shoping
Doc: This is not me. I wouldn't believe random teenagers who showed up at my mansion claiming to be from another time period -- not without some good, hard evidence, like Marty's bathroom story. And I tell them not to go anywhere without the right clothes, then immediately hand them some money and tell them to go shopping?! What irresponsibility!
Jennifer bought ,a blouse and a blue poddle skirt marty bought a leather jacket and leather pants
Marty: Leather PANTS?
Jennifer: *giggle*
they then decited to go to lou's cafe marty saw his father except he was 17 and Jennifer saw her mother she didnt rember, her because her mom died when she was a baby the two girls looked at each other Jennifer fainted, cladia just stared into space
Marty: Wait a minute, when is this? If I've already met Doc, shouldn't George not be at the cafe anymore? I mean, I don't think the guy LIVES there.
Jennifer: Uh -- if I don't remember my mother, why should I faint if I see her?
Doc: Precisely! The reason you fainted in Part II was because you saw and recognized your older self! You shouldn't be reacting that way to a parent you didn't even know!
Marty: And "cladia" just stares into space? I'd be kind of worried if someone fainted after seeing me.
Marty grabbed Jennifer and brought her to docs house, doc was standing there in shock
Doc: "Great Scott, I've been made to suffer brain damage at the hands of a rather incompentent author!"
marty what happened? um Jennifer ran into her mom great scot! i knew this would happen!
Marty: If you knew that would happen, why'd you let us go to the cafe?
Jennifer: And if you can see the future, why don't you use it to keep your mansion from burning down? Or win the lottery?
Doc: Well, we know my stance on gambling with the assistance of future information.
well i think you should stay here for a little longer, when Jennifer wakes up i wll explain the rules of time travel, well doc i got to be going now okay marty i will talk to you both in the morning.
. . . .
Marty: SHOULDN'T YOU BE LOCKING US IN YOUR MANSION?!
Doc: SHOULDN'T YOU BE MORE WORRIED ABOUT YOUR GIRLFRIEND?!
Jennifer: How old is this girl again?
Doc: *checks her profile again* Her profile doesn't say -- of course, her profile is only one sentence long. For all we know, this story could have been written by a eight-year-old.
Marty: Hell no. I was writing better than this at eight, and that's how old I was when I set fire to the living room rug.
SNIP! I'll cut Chapter 3 entirely. Basically, Jennifer wakes up at 7:00 that night, and Doc tells them the rules of time travel -- don't run into your parents and don't touch anything. That's it. And then he lets Jennifer go outside for a walk, and she randomly runs into Biff Tannen, who randomly tries to drag her away.
Chapter 4 uh oh were in trouble!
Doc: That's a statement I can fully agree with.
Marty: Hear hear!
who are you and what do you want with me oh i just want you to go to the prom with me no way i already have a date who marty mcfly and he's way better then you well to bad youre comeing with me
Jennifer: I don't know that much about him, but I don't think Biff just goes up to girls and tells them they're going to the prom with him.
Marty: It was the Enchantment Under the Sea Dance, not the prom! And Biff wouldn't bother with Jennifer, he had a crush on my mother! Uh, no offense Jennifer.
Jennifer: None taken.
Doc: *staring* You -- used -- Marty's -- real -- name. ARE YOU TRYING TO CAUSE A PARADOX?!
Marty: PodPerson you never told us not to, Doc. Besides, it looks like either Jennifer or Biff is talking to themselves.
never i wouldent go out with you if you were the last man on earth! Jennifer then steped on his foot and ran away Marty then cought up with here jen were have you been biff tried to kidanap me what well i guess we have to stay away from him ah huh now lets go find doc!
Marty: . . . You know, I think this version of me doesn't like Jennifer at all. I'm pretty nonchalant about her fainting and nearly being kidnapped.
Jennifer: And why do we have to find the Doc? Did I really wander that far away from the mansion?
Doc: *waving arms around like a windmill* You shouldn't have left the mansion at ALL! The only reason I let Marty out was because he had to fix things between his parents! Otherwise we run the risk of someone causing a paradox and wiping out the entire space-time continuum!
Marty: *ducking* Hey, Doc, be careful!
Doc: Precisely! WHY AREN'T I BEING CAREFUL?!
A/N:well like my cliffhanger please people i need ideas ps whoever said that i took this from the messege board yes your right i did but they wanted someone to write a fanfiction like this and stop being so mean to me in thje reviews!
Jennifer: That wasn't a cliffhanger. That was barely a stumble.
Marty: "Stop being so mean to me in the reviews?" What were they writing?
Doc: *checks* Someone was rewriting the stories in legible form, and others were telling the author how to improve.
Marty: *rolls eyes* "I need ideas" -- I've got an idea for you, take this story and shove it--
Jennifer: Marty!
Hello evreyone thank you to all who have reviewed my story well yes this was originaly gonna be about if Jennifer was involved in bttf part 2 and 3 but i decied to add her in 1 yes the other parts will come quickly chapter six will be the last chapter for part one chapter 7 will start part to well here is
Marty: She's doing Part I in six chapters?!
Doc: I suppose anything is possible once you cut out anything that has any narrative qualities. I doubt this story even has a plot.
Jennifer: Why can't I be in good fiction?
chapter 5
well we found doc and me and jennifer got on the skateboard to go to his house
Marty: Whoa, random POV switch.
Jennifer: How come we have your skateboard with us? Wasn't that left in 1985?
Doc: So you found me -- only to immediately turn around and go back to my house. Is there any logic at all in this story?
traffic was jammed Like always people were stareing at us like they have never seen anyone on a skateboard before?
Doc: As it's 1955, NO. What are you doing using 1985 technology in 1955, anyway?
Marty: Well, I sort of improvised it when Biff was chasing me around. Of course, that was to keep from getting killed by him and his gang. So I haven't a clue why Pod!me is doing this.
oh well we arived at doc's house aproxamitly at 12:00 pm.
Marty: That's -- that's IT?!
Jennifer: This was the result of the great "cliffhanger?"
Doc: Why did she even bother? She hasn't even updated from this point.
Marty: I suppose that that's actually a good thing. . . .
-VD: . . . That's got to be a troll.-
I don't know -- she is on the message board, and she types like that ALL THE TIME. She also has two other stories -- "Jennifer Parker's Diary" and "Jennifers Youngest Daughter," written in the same style.
-OD: *tentacles headdesk* We're sure she's not eight?-
*goes over to her profile on BTTFOnline* She lists her birthday as June 10, 1988. That means she's roughly two years younger than me -- about 17.
-M: *facepalm*-
Yeah, I know.
Well, I really need to ged to bed. Night all, enjoy the spork, and I dare someone to create an icon that reads: "Your stupidity makes (Doc Brown/Marty McFly) emo."
