All Righty Then

[crossover_chick]

Work was annoying again (though not to the level of yesterday), my knees hurt because I managed to trip and fall on the way to work, and I'm pretty sure I'm PMSing. Boys, suit up:


Story Or Series Title: time travelers in trouble!
Fandom: Back To The Future
Culprit Author's Name: princessserenity3000 (Of course, we all know her)

Full Name (plus titles if any): Doc Brown, Marty McFly, Jennifer Parker
Full Species(es): Canonus Warpedis
Hair Color (include adjectives): White/Brown/Brown
Eye Color (include adjectives): Brown/Blue/Brown
Unusual Markings/Colorations: None
Special Possessions (if any): Murderous robots

Annoying Origin: The January backtothefanfic challenge
Annoying Connections To Canon Characters: Pretending to be them
Annoying Special Abilities: Having less plot than random sentences strung together
Other Annoying Traits: Run-ons. God, the run-ons.

Please include a small sample of the worst of this story:
Doc: Not again!
Don't worry, guys, this one is REALLY short. One chapter with almost no plot.
Marty: Oh, thank God.
Jennifer: Let's get it over with.
time travelers in trouble!
a back to the future lj january chalenge fan fic written by pgsmfreak rated pg13
Marty: PG13? *laughs his head off*
Jennifer: Oh crap, I just thought about what she would do if she ever wrote R-rated fic.
Marty: *stops laughing*
chapter one

december 27th 1985
Doc: I bet it just burns you up that this is set on your future birthday.
Hell yes.

Doc Brown was working on his latest

invention when Jennifer and Marty

walked in to the room what are you up

to doc jennifer asked
Doc: What does this girl have against capitalization?
Marty: And apostrophes?
Jennifer: And, you know, telling us where we are when the fic starts?
oh just making some upgrades to the time machine im

almost finished i also invented two

robots and im gonna test them out
Doc: Can we have details, please?
Marty: Maybe you made the train all pink and sparkly.
*all imagine that, hysterics*

wow marty exclamied youve been real

busy well with clara and the boys

at disney world for 3 weeks i have to

have somthing to keep me occupied,
Doc: *arches eyebrow* And I wouldn't go WITH my family why?
Marty: Okay, shouldn't we have had a period by now?
Jennifer: All puncuation has been sucked into the black hole that is this fic.

doc then turned the robots on

then the robots started to walk
Marty: Riveting.

and grabed jennifer and started choking

her
Jennifer: Yup, Princess here ADORES me.
Marty: What the heck is "grabing?"

hey let me go! doc somthings wrong

with this robot
Doc: *evil smile* Oh, nothing's wrong, my dear girl. I know you're really a pod person from the outer reaches of the galaxy!
Marty: Doc, that's kind of creepy.
Jennifer: Choke that pod person, robot!

doc then turnd the

robot off and marty took jennifer down

thank you marty and doc
Marty:. . . That's it? Shouldn't the remote break or something?
Doc: Things never go this well for us.
Jennifer: Marty took me down? How tall are these robots?
Marty: The world shall never know.

oh hey you two how would you like

to time travel to the midevil times?
Jennifer: Is that supposed to be me or Doc speaking?
Doc: I don't know -- I prefer the midgood times myself.
Marty: *groan*

oh id love to exclmied
Doc: It's the secret incantation to summon TORGO!
Cookies for the Manos reference!
both marty

and jennifer well get in the delorean
Marty: You know, it always amazes me that she can spell "DeLorean" correctly. She can't capitalize it, but she can spell it.

then alright with that the delorean

took off at 88 miles per hour
Doc: Wait a minute! We're not inside yet!
Marty: The DeLorean really wants out of this fic!

TO BE CONTINUED!
Jennifer: Capitals! Puncuation!
Marty: It's amazing!
Doc: And this is it?
Well, there's a second chapter, but it's exactly one run-on sentence long. Not worth it.
Doc: Thank God. Over and out.

The inspiration for this: Ael's rant on this chick


Ahhh. It may have been short, but I feel better already.
-VD: Glad to hear it. Now can you write your own capitalized and puncuated fanfic?-
I believe I can. Got a lot done on "Boy Genius" 2.0 today to make up for not getting to it yesterday.
-TD: *beam* Glad to hear it.-
And I have that fanart to work on.
-OD: Yes yes yes.-
-DW: Any ideas for the current backtothefanfic challenge?-
Sort of -- I was thinking of doing Prompt 1, since I kind of already covered Prompt 2 with "Homecoming." Hmmmm. . . .
-HD: Well, it's Clara's birthday in just 26 minutes and 42 seconds. Hopefully that will provide inspiration.-
*fingers crossed*
-RPD: Did you update revison_doc?-
Yup -- Marie and Daniel are happy elders now. Had a nice little birthday party. Tomorrow, I'm trying for Otto and Rosie's wedding.
-VD2: Interesting. . . .-
Anyway, fic time. See y'all later!

Comments

[foxywriter.livejournal.com]

LMAO!!! OMG...I thought I was the only one who was so annoyed by that psuedo-fanfic author. That's classic, CLASSIC! *snicker*

[gigs-83.livejournal.com]

Looking at Ael's rant and seeing that comment someone said about seeing "Marty is a vampire!" on the first page of FF.Net made me think of you. I kind of got insulted, cuz you're fics are so well-written and addicting, I often find myself re-reading them multiple times. I always say (esp. with mine cuz no one likes a Mary Sue *pets AL, eliciting a glare from her*) to read it first, judge it later. Though, with mine, I write 'em for myself and if no one likes 'em, it's no skin off my front. :)

[docsgirl.livejournal.com]

Oh, TRUST me, it's not just you. Her reviews on FF.net are filled with people telling her what she needs to do to improve (heck, Anakin McFly was rewriting the stories in legible form for a while), and she just didn't listen.

I took on two of her other stories as well:
The Alternate BTTF (http://docsgirl.livejournal.com/274144.html#cutid1)
Jennifer's Youngest Daughter (http://docsgirl.livejournal.com/297057.html#cutid1)

[docsgirl.livejournal.com]

Yeah -- I can understand though, that my crazier fanfics are not everybody's cup of tea. I'm just in love with the idea of AU and crossover.

And to be fair, that "Marty is a vampire" fic the person saw was most likely The Vampire Awakening (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3309787/1/) -- and THAT author is practically as bad as JenniferJane here. She writes in script format too.

[bttfbabe.livejournal.com]

Marty: The DeLorean really wants out of this fic!

Okay, I really try like mad not to laugh at other people's writing, because I don't want it t o bite me in the ass. However, that was hilarious. Actually, the whole post was funny.

If that girl can write, then there is no excuse for her not to at least draft her stories out on paper. Sheesh!

[smudge-pot.livejournal.com]

*dies laughing*

Every time I read a chapter of this author's, I lose a couple more brain cells. When she posted chapter 2 on backtothefanfic I just sat there staring. ROFL!

[shonasheastwood.livejournal.com]

*wipes away the tears from laughing so hard* I am supremely glad that I was not the only one that went *WTF?* when I read that awful example of fanfic.

Even myself, as a rank amateur, would probably do a better job than that!

[docsgirl.livejournal.com]

LOL, glad you like. People seem to enjoy the sporkings. :)

And yeah, really! Ael copy-pasted a large "look at all the shit you did wrong" comment from the fanficrants post, and all she said was "sorry it's so short, my mom was yelling at me to get off-line, and I have to write when it comes to me." I mean, in that case, wouldn't it be EASIER to write it on paper first?

[docsgirl.livejournal.com]

I KNOW! It's frightening, it really is.

I should do a "classics from the RPG" post -- she ended up with the role of Jennifer there, and she handled that just like she handled her fanfic.
-RPD: Drove us all nuts, I can assure you.-

[docsgirl.livejournal.com]

LOL, glad you liked. Apparently I do good spork.

And yeah. I wonder if English is her first language sometimes -- but even then, I've seen fics from non-native speakers that are a heck of a lot better than this.

[bttfbabe.livejournal.com]

You would think. You know, no one is asking her to write award winning fiction, but a little effort would be nice.

[bttfbabe.livejournal.com]

I was really stressing over my assignment which has to be mailed out by the end of next week. Everytime I read a line, I would say, "That sounds like absolute crap! My instructor is going to flunk me! I'll never graduate this course!"

Then I read that "story" and I felt so much better. Thank you for posting this.